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[size=150]Chapter 15: The Monster Inside[/size]

___With her maps laid out in the middle, Portunista’s tent was cramped. But this didn’t bother the juacuar, who often crouched in corners while scouting or stalking. Fortunately, her quarters were cooling, with evening.
___“Gentlemen,” she began. “While decoding Gemalfan’s disciplex, to learn what his plans had been, I discovered that he had deduced the location of—a Cadrist Tower!”
___Seifas’ spine twinged; he bated his breath, just in case.
___“These towers weren’t marked on official maps,” continued Portunista. “But, by comparing amateur maps, appropriated from various traders who used to serve the Cadrists, the towers can be uncovered.” She paused to smile triumphantly.
___“Here!” Portunista stabbed her master map.
___“The Tower of Qarfax!”

___So.
___Now there would be trouble.

___Seifas bitterly sighed. All eyes turned toward him.
___“You have something to say, Seifas?” Portunista asked with mild surprise.
___“I garrisoned at that Tower, several seasonal slopings ago.”

___Anger started burning in the maga’s eyes. She could easily work the math: he had joined her brigade bare weeks at most, after serving Qarfax.
___“And why, please tell, did you withhold this information?”
___“Because I didn’t think you were ready to know it.”
___Dagon snorted at Seifas’ answer. Gaekwar ducked his head, propping a grin behind a hand. Othon warily edged away from the line between the juacuar and their irate commander.
___But Seifas focused on Portunista, daring her to explode. Her dusky skin grew pale with rage.
___“And do…” she finally forced through slitted lips, “you think I’m ready now?”
___“No. But I know you’ll go there anyway.”
___He didn’t blink or move, but easily breathed, regularly, in and out, trying to radiate a rational calmness.
___But—later that night, requiring honesty from himself, he wrote down words of treason…

___“She couldn’t threaten to punish me with expulsion, or demotion; she knew I would gladly leave, taking along perhaps some soldiers with me. More important, her chances of success in any combat increased dramatically, as long as one of the Guacu-ara worked for her. She knew that, too.
___“I waited; and I listened.
___“Would she rant? Then I would leave: she wouldn’t be worth protecting any longer, having become completely unobjective of herself.

___“But—I also thought…”

___Seifas’ pen froze to the paper.
___He remembered those moments; lifted his pen, past the ink he had trailed down the page, and tried again.

___“But if her next sounds were percussive, a jotting…”

___Did he dare to write it??
___But he had devoted himself to trying another facet of justice—a justice upon himself.
___He forced himself to relive those moments fully…

___“…then—she would have discovered the length a juacuar can leap, from a tensioned crouch.
___“I didn’t need to lower my eyes to see her throat. In my imagination I could feel it crushing, in my hand, against her spine.”

___A bead of sweat fell onto the paper. Seifas lifted his pen to start another line, seeing again what he had imagined…

___“We would land…there…further from the flap of the tent.
___“Between myself and freedom, would be three enfuried men.
___“At least three men would die.
___“…and so would my soul.”

___There.
___It was written.
___Seifas read over and over again—what he was capable of.

___“But,” he continued, no longer bearing to see what he had written, “I would gladly sacrifice myself, to keep her from becoming a monster.
___“Not her. As long as I live it won’t be her.
___“So I waited, to learn the extent of my failure.”

[size=150]Chapter 16: Adding Things Up[/size]

___Portunista’s throat choked.
___She couldn’t speak. She barely breathed.
___Here she had been, blundering round in the back of nowhere—and at any moment Seifas could have given her what she’d been searching for!
___She tasted blood; and forced away her irrational anger, swallowing and relaxing. This was not worth chewing her lips to a froth.
___Her first impulse had been to peel back Seifas’ skin—she had also learned a few new jottings from Gemalfan’s disciplex, and wanted to test a theory of hers.
___But killing the juacuar would serve her nothing. She needed the man—he was an edge that few of her peers could match.
___Besides, she didn’t really doubt that he would help her; though whether to win, or merely survive…?
___Portunista wanted to win.
___She exhaled, as gently as she had inhaled, watching the deadly man who crouched on the other side of the maps…his eyes stayed locked with hers, his arms crossed lightly upon his knees. She watched him easily breathe…and knew that she would never intimidate him—not this way.
___And from the corners of her eyes, she watched the other men, watching her watch him…waiting to see what she would do…
___“Perhaps it is just as well,” allowed Portunista. “I might indeed have failed, not knowing the things I know, if you had told me earlier. What matters now, is now I know.”
___Possibly not the most coherent statement she ever had uttered…! But, she was pleased to see relief from Seifas, as he settled back onto his heels, with a nod. Perhaps he had been wondering how many quivering fragments she would blast him into.
___Well, she thought…he should!
___“Watching you two flare your nostrils, is very entertaining,” Gaekwar drawled. “But if you won’t be killing each other, I have things to do.”
___“I suppose,” admitted Portunista thinly, “I had better hear what you may know, Seifas, before I finalize my plans. Please,” she added, with an attempt at a smile.
___So, Seifas told how he and nine other men had been recruited from Wye, a border fort between Lemalsamac and Noi.
___“As far as I could tell,” he said, “the magus picked the other nine without regard for who they were as long as they seemed healthy.”
___“Didn’t much care who he got…” Gaekwar stroked his shaven chin. “Except for you. I don’t buy it. Something isn’t adding up…”
___“Too few,” Othon rumbled. Everyone turned to him. “Too few,” he insisted confidently.
___Seifas shrugged. “His tower wasn’t the size of a keep. And he barracked us on the bottom floor. Then again,” he pondered Othon’s implications, “the dell in which the Tower stands, provides at least two klips of clear diameter field. We set a couple of outside-roving pickets—I was one myself—but certainly not enough to properly cover the treeline.”
___“Too few,” Othon repeated, nodding once in satisfaction.
___“What was your squad expected to do?” Portunista settled into place, her anger now forgotten. “Why exactly were you there?”
___“As a garrison. ‘For mundane threats,’ as Qarfax said.”
___“Hmph!” Dagon interjected. “What ‘mundane’ kind of threats would bother a Cadrist?!”
___“Brigades and their scouts,” Portunista mused. “Or maybe bandits. As you can see on the map,” she briefly flung her hand, “the area is remote. Demimen hordes? Giants?”
___“Exactly,” Dagon nodded. “Even a ‘juacuar’,” he slightly sneered, “isn’t good enough to kill a brigade—or a horde, or anything else like that—and for bloody sure, a squad of faceless mercs would not be tipping the scales! And does anyone else remember what was going on, that Qarfax might have been specially worried about?”
___“Plenty!” Portunista snorted. “Cadrists had been launching wars against each other for nearly a year and—”
___“Dying,” Othon darkly finished. He slid his eyes to her; she yanked her line of thought to a halt.
___“Disappearing, yes,” she nodded. “Aside from killing each other, too.”
___“Like the do-gooding mouthpieces.” Dagon didn’t look at Seifas, but the man of the Guacu-ara knew at whom that barb was aimed.
___“No!” retorted the juacuar, although he quickly reined his irritation. “All the klerosa vanished at once; the Cadrists began to disappear later, in a progression. Yes?”
___Portunista nodded. “That seems right.”
___“Someone who kept his ears clean, would have heard enough to know the difference,” Seifas added as an aside. ___Gaekwar blinked and Portunista tilted her head; but Dagon jerked and reflexively rubbed an ear. Seifas smiled.
___“So, did Qarfax disappear on you?” Gaekwar asked.
___“In a way…” Seifas shuddered.
___He told how they had found the magus, on that final night.
___Dagon whistled lowly through his teeth. “So, we could end up burned to ash, hm? I hear the coast is lovely in the autumn…”
___“Clothes.” Othon squinted as he thought the matter through.
___“Right!” Gaekwar snapped his fingers. “You found his clothes and things piled on the floor, you said? Around the ash?” ___Seifas nodded. “So he hadn’t moved,” the ‘cowherd’ mused, his drawl receding as it often did when deep in thought. “Scorching? Damage from smoke? No,” Gaekwar murmured, as Seifas shook his head. “So he didn’t burn to death—not in any conventional sense. Talk to us, Portunista.”
___“Well…there are several methods…” But she trailed to silence, unable to give a fitting suggestion.
___“So—let’s take a tally,” Gaekwar resumed his ironic drawl. “We’re talking about a powerful Cadrist…right?”
___He flicked a glance at Portunista, who nodded: “Like many Cadre members, he was a researcher. Into principles of superspace, as I remember the rumors. Very strong in Yrthe and Watyr: he wrote a textbook we were taught from.”
___“Superspace,” Dagon muttered, “hm…”
___“Rogues.”
___Othon let the deadly word slip into the chilling air.
___Outside, the sun was setting. Seifas could smell the autumn, in the back of his mind. Earlier on that afternoon, he had been praying for its arrival.
___Now he felt decay, and death.
___“Did you see any sign of Roguents, Seifas?” Portunista asked; with perhaps a tremor to her voice…
___The juacuar shrugged once more. “No. But how would I know? We didn’t find a signature nailed in his entrails on the ceiling. Yet, Qarfax certainly died,” he emphasized in understatement.
___“Oh, this gets better and better…” Dagon sighed, with equal irony.
___“So…” Gaekwar cleared his throat. “We have a powerful Cadrist,” he started again, “who can probably mulch a horde of demimen, if he puts his mind to it; and who also feels reasonably safe in mucking around with the fabric of space. He hires one very good fighter, and a passel of mediocre ones, as some protection above and beyond whatever geegaws he’s woven around the area. Nevertheless, whatever he was afraid of still apparently whomped him, not even bothering Seifas and the others. Yet Portunista thinks we oughta traipse on out there anyway—which not only means we’re risking our arms being handed to us by maybe a ticked-off Rogue; but also we have to worry about being zorched by anything trip-wired into the place!” And he inhaled dramatically. “Did I miss anything?”
___“It might not have been a Rogue!” protested Portunista. “The Cadrists were fighting one another, remember?”
___“Then why should we go?” asked Dagon, not unreasonably. “They’ll have looted his place already!”
___“Clothes,” grunted Othon again.
___“Exactly,” nodded Portunista. “Whatever killed the magus didn’t kill you, Seifas, or your squad. You did find everything still in place, untouched, yes?” He nodded grudgingly. “Something, or someone, strong enough to kill Qarfax so easily, hardly would run and hide at hearing you and your squad coming up the stairs. Therefore, either it only wanted to kill him, or else to kill him and then get one or two particular things: because it left the other things behind. I say odds are good, that we’ll still find them there. And if the Tower has been looted already, then someone will have probably set off any traps, and we shall be quite safe.”
___“On the other hand,” Dagon wryly remarked, “this would seem to mean that Cadrists didn’t kill him—they would want his raw materials and equipment for themselves, wouldn’t they? At least the ‘geegaws’ from his body, right? So…” he finished, “do we feel better, or worse?”
___“Worse,” muttered Othon, shaking his head.
___But Seifas sighed, for he could see the light in Portunista’s eyes. She was looking beyond these problems, to the obvious reward.
___She might one day be like Qarfax!
___Of course, thought Seifas, that had not helped Qarfax…

Next chapter

Notes from the real author…

Back when I first wrote Section One, I didn’t have any idea what I’d be doing in (what became) the rest of this book. I knew where I wanted to arrive in regard to how Portunista becomes Empress, and I knew where I wanted to arrive (several books later) in regard to how Portunista stops being Empress, but I needed some things for Portunista & Company to do before she could feasibly arrive at point B(ecoming Empress). I still figured that would be the end of Book 1, but when I realized a smaller book would be more marketable (in theory :wink: ) for a new author, I found a stopping place far short of Point B.

The preceding chapters in Section Two allowed me to introduce (most of) the important secondary characters (or all of them really as I hadn’t invented the last one yet and didn’t yet see a need to), but now I had to come up with something for them to do to gell together as a group and get them moving with a larger army toward Plot Point B.

So, what does 'ista need? Resources for her little army to survive over the coming winter (or else they’ll desert or mutiny). But they’re large enough they’d need more than a few villages to sponge off (which would be evil and kind of narratively boring anyway), and not large enough to force a city to supply them over the winter (which while also basically evil would be narratively more interesting. Also the obvious next stage after Book 1. :sunglasses: ) Nor are they likely to grow much more in the next several weeks before winter while randomly wandering the hinterlands hoping to stumble on other small forces randomly wandering the hinterlands.

A gadget looting run solves this narrative problem several ways: it’s something Portunista would personally be looking to do; it’s something that Gemalfan’s recent arrival and defeat can provide opportunity for (thus explaining why she hasn’t tried already); it’s something other wandering small brigades would also be trying, thus providing a focus point for conflict (and providing the extra troops she’ll need for conquering a small city later), although none of the characters think quite that far ahead to expect competition yet :wink: ; and it provides a stage for working out issues among the group while they cooperate together to overcome common goals.

Plus, to be blunt, low-level characters (even if they have elite butt-kickers like Seifas around) go explore dungeons or towers or things like that until they level up enough to make a real impression on politics. :slight_smile:

These two little chapters thus pack a lot of usefulness into a short space–which is substantially shorter than in my original draft, because after all nothing is really happening except for characters literally sitting around and plotting out what the plot will be about. :wink:

They also gave me an opportunity to work on a few things other than preliminary plot exposition and justification, however.

First, and most importantly, it gave me a way to illustrate that Seifas has some burgeoning romantic feelings for Portunista after all, but because he’s so intense they aren’t altogether healthy. Moreover, his intensity shows that his newfound sort-of-optimism about justice doesn’t necessarily translate over into stable behavior. I didn’t have anything particularly in mind at this point, I just wanted to put the pieces in place so I’d have things to play with later. (Also, it’s a subtle way of indicating that Seifas could have easily gone the route of thinking that he himself ought to be his own standard of justice–but for people of a particular temperament, when they think they are serving justice they can be just as problematic for other people.)

Second, it gave me some chances to show that Dagon hasn’t stayed around this long by being completely incompetent. One of my groundrules was that to avoid him being constantly the group’s butt monkey, he ought to be shown to be CORRECT as much as possible. And if he misjudges (which he doesn’t at all here), he ought to have good reasons for doing so, with only a few critical lapses due to vanity or jealousy or whatever. Despite how it may seem, Dagon was one of the few characters (along with Portunista and Jian, and the Preface Author) I’d invented before starting the book, and I knew from the beginning where I wanted his character to go, even though I didn’t have a clue how to get there. But having him be only an irritating in-group villainous incompetent goofball wouldn’t get him there. :slight_smile: (Besides which, as noted, it wouldn’t explain in-story why 'ista had kept him around this long.)

Third, I got to flesh out the way other people (not just Dagon) looked and acted a little. Othon is definitely an authorial self-dare: how much useful information can I pack into as few words from him as possible? (But then I also needed an explanation for why he doesn’t talk much, and during this time I came up with one that also explained his unusual size, and basically mapped out his pre-story history, to be revealed later as opportunities arise.)

And last, Seifas’ unstable emotional intensity gave me a moment of imaginary action-scene to flesh up the general lack of such things in this Section.

So, with the plot established (although with a few more preliminary conclusions to draw next chapter), and some further characterization drawn up, it’s time for the Dagon/Jian duel. :smiley: